The Chicago Cubs have finally made it to the World Series after 71 years! Many people cried of exhilaration and even threw fireworks for the Cubbies as a celebration. On October 22, 2016 the Chicago Cubs defeated the Dodgers by 5-0, making them advance to the World Series. This historic moment happened in Wrigley Field, Chicago, Illinois. After Chapman got the final five outs the whole team raced to him and mobbed him. After the game ended Rizzo was proud and still processing his astonishment, he said, "We got four more big ones to go, but we're going to enjoy this. We're going to the World Series. I can't even believe that." Although even before the game many people had lost faith in the Cubs after the “curse” of the Billy Goat was supposedly placed on them in 1945. Since then the Cubs haven’t won a World Series. But the Chicago Cubs have proved to everyone that a “curse” won't phase them or stop them from becoming the next champions.
So I like your lead sentence, it grabs the reader's attention. And you found qoutes which really helped the reader understand what the players were feeling and saying about their win. But one way you can improve your writing is by adding a few commas to your paragraph. But overall you did a great job.
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